Thursday, July 21, 2011

First poem here, how do you like it?

Well if you meant that this was actually your first written poem, it's excellent. However, if you meant that this is your first serious poem then I think it needs a little work. You repeat "catastrophe" twice which is a huge negative in any literary work. Also, you seem to be very random in your poem. Creeps and penguins might sound like cool things to include but they don't actually add anything to your poem's meaning. I like how you chose to be creative but your ideas are ranging too much. What more, your poem lacks a meaning and a purpose. Try to insert a specific message into your poem and have a colorful theme. This poem seems pretty good, however, if you are just beginning to write poems. You're very creative and that'll help you out a ton if you consider writing more poems. Good luck :).

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